chapter 1
One day,there were three best friend siting under a tree,suddenly,there was a UFO hitting towards them, when the UFO landed on the ground , they ran to see it. "wow! UFO!"said ken."hei, maybe this is the button to open the UFO!?"said Jerry pushing the button.Suddenly,an alien ran out from the UFO ,the alien cried:"you guys got to help me!" "why?"said john. "because i have been chased by an alien named octobrain!" "ok , but how?"said Ken. "here you go , these are your weapons,and from now on you are the "Alien hunters!"
chapter 2
"you are not going to win octobrain!""you are wrong!I am going to win!diamondbrains attack!""piece of cake!I can defect them with one hand!""Nonsense! fight!""let's roll guys!""ya!"After five minutes，the fight stop."h...h...h... we have to go Jonh!'No Ken we can't leave!""yes we can!""shut your mouths!This time is going to be hander to escape,Ha!Ha!Ha! General octo ,come out!"boo....boo....boo......"oh no is really a big one!" The alien use its claws shot on Ken.zark!!!"no ! no!"Ha! Ha!Ha!Ha!Ｉ am very happy!you!you got to pay for this!"And John use his hand to punch octobrain's brain.POW!!!!"How...how did you know my weakness?!""Everyone know your weakness,DUMP!""john .....now can we go?"' no,not yet!we must take octobrain to the alien jail first，then we can go，OK!”So ，they take octobrain to the jail
flew back home。。。。
"you are not going to win octobrain!""you are wrong!I am going to win!diamondbrains attack!""piece of cake!I can defect them with one hand!""Nonsense! fight!""let's roll guys!""ya!"After five minutes，the fight stop."h...h...h... we have to go Jonh!'No Ken we can't leave!""yes we can!""shut your mouths!This time is going to be hander to escape,Ha!Ha!Ha! General octo ,come out!"boo....boo....boo......"oh no is really a big one!" The alien use its claws shot on Ken.zark!!!"no ! no!"Ha! Ha!Ha!Ha!Ｉ am very happy!you!you got to pay for this!"And John use his hand to punch octobrain's brain.POW!!!!"How...how did you know my weakness?!""Everyone know your weakness,DUMP!""john .....now can we go?"' no,not yet!we must take octobrain to the alien jail first，then we can go，OK!”So ，they take octobrain to the jail
flew back home。。。。
HELL HORSE
wow!! the story was cool,i wonder what happen next..... so, alien zone, hmmmmm......oh ya, keep up the good work!
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汉铭
there will be more interesting if you have some picture or even a simple sketch to describe your story....
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ReplyDeletesome and spelling and grammer correction need to be done
chapter one
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case to chase
went to when
anyway, you story is so cute
and sound interesting, i wonder what would happen next? from geik yan
Halo Han jung, I am very proud of you and han ming! Both of you are excellent! 加油！
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小姑
wow ! chapter two is cool too, i don't think that 'octobrain' will be so easy to be caught....well bye
ReplyDeletehan ming...
cool hell horse !!!!!!!!!
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